Grade 11 Level 1 Writing Sample

Do you think it is important for people to continue to travel into space?  Why or why not?  You may want to think about issues, such as:

  • costs
  • dangers
  • rewards.
Student Example

Student writing sample:

Travel in space is goodWhy, because it's good to know about space and everything there, like sun and stars and etc... Because they can see anythings outside the earth but people will do some activities for space for know somethingSome people thinks that space exploration is a enjoyable things to do.  a danger can happen when you use a think in right time an right placeIf people continue to travel into space, I think there will have som things come to anywhere people liv.  The: rewards may affect if you do not take it in time or life can happen a problem.  When you come back in the earthThey were get many Rawards they are welcome by many rewards.

Uses more utility words (sun, stars, etc., earth, people), descriptive words (everything, outside, enjoyable) and subject-specific words (activities, exploration).

Uses familiar nouns (earth, people, space), pronouns (I, you, they, it), adjectives (some, any, many), adverbs (there, anywhere), prepositions (for, to, in, by), articles (a, the) and verbs (see, know, happen, use, think, will have).

Writes simple declarative sentences (Travel in space is good.), negative sentences (you do not take) and question sentences (Why).

Uses copying (danger, rewards) and sentence frames (If people continue to travel into space) to write ideas.

Produces texts using familiar words (something, things), phrases (like, right time an [and] right place) and sentence frames (It’s good to know about …).

Connects ideas using common conjunctions (and, because, but, or), time markers (when) and sequence markers (no evidence).

Edits sentences for capitalization of words at the beginning of sentences (Some, They), periods (.) and regular spelling of familiar words (because, space, can, people, time, life).

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