Grade 9 Level 3 Writing Sample

Compare your home village or city to the place you live now. Describe the things that are the same and different.
Student Example

Student writing sample:

To Comparing the city of A with my home town is very astonishing because there is no similarity between these two places there a lot of differences take for example.

My home town so similar to a ghetto, where everyone is rude? and always looking for a way to get something from you not give it is like an every man for himself situation on the streets are gut wrenching. Policemen are corruptible, transportation is undandble undescribable, drivers are reckless, and the place is disorganise. there is always crisis, conflicts and fights its like a jungle and not to forget power shortage, people there are primitive, so many illiterate and also lack of employement the government is gradually dipl breaking down. But compared to the city of A from what I’ve noticed people are always willing to help you out, city the city is well developed there are good social amneties as well as Power and water supply also there is good transportation, everyone follow certain directives. In my home town rich people suffer a lot cos robbers take you as a source of money there is a lot of insecurity, no poor medical facilities compared to A there is are programs trying to help the less fortunate

Uses a range of utility words (home town, everyone, fights, policemen, city, money), descriptive words (ghetto, rude, corruptible, undescribable [indescribable], reckless, disorganise [disorganized], primitive, illiterate, gradually, well developed, good, insecurity, poor), subject-specific words (crisis, conflicts, power shortage, water supply, employement [employment], government, transportation, medical facilities) and academic words (similar, compared, situation, programs) related to curricular concepts.

Writes regular plurals (streets, drivers, robbers), possessive pronouns (my), prepositional phrases (for a way, from you), regular verbs in continuous (looking, trying) and simple past tenses (compared), irregular verbs in continuous (no evidence) and simple past tenses (no evidence) with more control of agreement and tense. 

Level 2: Writes detailed simple sentences and sentences with clauses (Comparing the city of A with my home town is very astonishing because there is no similarity between these two places there a lot of differences take for example.). (Writes run-on sentences and needs to learn how to formulate a detailed thought in one sentence.)
Approaching Level 3: Writes a variety of simple, compound and complex sentences, ideas in logical sequence and detailed paragraphs.

Uses known phrases (gut-wrenching, social amenities, breaking down, less fortunate, cos [because], take you), common expressions (every man for himself, like a jungle, from what I’ve noticed) and cognates.

Level 3: Produces text for specific purposes. Writes a comparative paragraph.
Approaching Level 4: Produces texts with knowledge of culturally appropriate forms and styles. (Needs to work on developing the academic format of a paragraph, including topic sentence introduction, clearly organized statements with support in the form of examples and explanation, and a conclusion.)

Connects ideas in a basic paragraph using conjunctions (because, and, but), time markers (no evidence) and sequence markers (also, as well as).

Level 2: Edits sentences for end punctuation (.), commas in a list (crisis, conflicts), simple tenses (omitted “is” or “are” at times, “is/are” corrected in last sentence), regular spelling (people, home town, source) and addition of details (people are always willing to help you out).
Approaching Level 3: Edits sentences for placement of apostrophes, quotation marks, a variety of tenses and common irregularly spelled words.

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